He sighed softly as he entered the third floor hallway, feeling suddenly even colder than he had outside in the rain. The extra bedroom Caitlin had spent the night in was the first he passed, and even the sight of its closed door filled him with a fresh rush of the desperate heartache that had been his constant companion over the past week. The one night Caitlin had spent in his house out of necessity had been enough to transform it, imprinting each facet of its structure with her memory. Every staircase spanned a journey to the depths of his misery, and an agonising recollection waited behind each door; a sudden flash of the exact shade of pink her cheeks went when he kissed her, seen by his mind’s eye, or a memory of her hair brushing his cheek, so vivid he almost thought it was real. Shutting his eyes against the sight of the hall where they had walked together, he pushed open his bedroom door. Here, at least, was a place she hadn’t been.
A very emotional six! :)
ReplyDeleteI'm loving this look in his thoughts and emotions!
ReplyDeleteA great excerpt, as always, Ranae! Happy Sunday.
ReplyDeleteThis brings out some great emotions. Very nicely done!
ReplyDeleteOh, how sad. I love the show of emotions in this scene. A great but heart-wrenching six!
ReplyDeleteI can feel his emotions! Great six!
ReplyDeleteAwesome 6! You showed so wonderfully how she now 'haunts' his house with his memory of her. I especially loved how you introduced this insight: "The one night Caitlin had spent in his house out of necessity had been enough to transform it, imprinting each facet of its structure with her memory." You captured so well that phenomenon and his sadness.
ReplyDeleteGreat six, Ranae! I enjoyed how you developed his inner turmoil. :)
ReplyDelete"every staircase spanned a journey..." Nice!
ReplyDeleteCan really feel his pain there. Such a powerful thought; that the house has picked up Caitlin's presence, like he clearly struggling with himself. :)
ReplyDeleteI agree with Sandra on the staircase spanned a journey line. That one really leaped off the page and tells so much! What an absorbing piece.
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